One day I was
playing with my friend. Suddenly I heard a crack and it didn't sound very
far away. Me and my friend were very terrified we didn't know what to do. We
thought it was an earthquake so we dropped covered and held. Until
nothing happened so we got up and walked back inside. Then we started
to play on the computer. Suddenly we heard the crack again but we didn't
care about it because nothing happened the first time so we just carried on
playing until a real earthquake came. We were so scared that we were running
around the room saying “what do we do what do we do” we started to go crazy.
To Tawhiao,
ReplyDeleteI like how you used speech marks to show dialogue with people talking.
Just remember we don't say me and my friend we say my friend and I.
Don't forget that it is ok to have a range of longer and some shorter sentences in your writing. Have a look at the second sentence that starts with suddenly. It is quite a long sentence how could you break it up?
From Mrs Head